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То си беше предвидено, но малко по-лежерно, а сега почва да става спешно, а от печатницата дават малко длъжки срокове.

Наближава нова година и сега е сезона на календарите.

Да, същия отговор получих.

Определено е по-удачно да е там, а имат и да компенсират голям брак.

High up in the mountain, deep inside the forest, alongside the river, in a hole in the ground, there lived a gremling. Like all gremlings, he didn't have a name, but everyone called him Gremmy. Gremmy loved to walk his pawsies around the forest, wash his downy fur in the river and bathe his tail in the sun, but most of all he loved to munch. He munched blueberries, strawberries and mushrooms, but most of all he loved to munch blackberries and smear them all over his nuzzle-muzzle. But one day there was no more food!

To the meadow came the Old and Wise Granny Dragon and announced that there would be no more food, because it was summer now, but soon it would be autumn and then winter, and there would be no more food. That was how seasons worked. The gremling didn't know what seasons were, but his tummy grew very worried that there would be no food tomorrow and it would be left hungry. Then his little horns proposed that everyone should go on an adventure to find food for the whole winter!

The gremling bustled around his hole, cleaning up, cutting, hammering, cooking and packing his luggage for the adventure to come. In his little pouch, he put a comb, an enchanted key, a piece of old bread, a rope and a rusty penny. It was going to be an incredible adventure, the way only adventures can be!

And you, little gremling, listening (or reading) this tale, are going to decide what will happen. Your choices will guide the adventures of Gremmy. So, first you have to decide where he will go:

He could enter the Dark Cave, where he'd heard magic mushrooms were growing. Gremmy loved mushrooms and he had never had the magic sort. (Chapter Two)

He could climb the Big Mountain, where blackberries grew at the top. And Gremmy loved blackberries! (Chapter Three)

He could go down along the Deep River and reach the houses of humans. They threw away chips and sweets and biscuits and crackers and what not! (Chapter Four)

He could enter the Enchanted Forest, where enchanted things happened and the world's most beautiful flower grew. And that flower’s pollen, they said, was incredibly tasty. (Chapter Five)

Gremmy stopped and wondered! (If necessary, read the choices again.)

Преводът е добър, но не перфектен. English to English translation ще е нужна след това, както каза Иън

Чувствайте се свободни да пишете критика, може да е само от полза.

Анотация: не пиша поста "за да демонстрирам превъзходството си" или "да избивам комплекси", а за да помогна на автора. Мнението по-долу е лично и субективно.

High up in the mountain, deep inside the forest, alongside the river, in a hole in the ground, there lived a gremling. Like all gremlings, he didn't have a name, but everyone called him Gremmy. Gremmy loved to walk his pawsies around the forest, wash his downy fur in the river and bathe his tail in the sun, but most of all he loved to munch. He munched blueberries, strawberries and mushrooms, but most of all he loved to munch blackberries and smear them all over his nuzzle-muzzle. But one day there was no more food!

To the meadow came the Old and Wise Granny Dragon and announced that there would be no more food, because it was summer now, but soon it would be autumn and then winter, and there would be no more food. That was how seasons worked. The gremling didn't know what seasons were...

- High up или High in; не е грешно, но е тежко и не ми звучи
- mountains според мен ще е по-добре на английски
- in a hole in the ground - двете "in" не ми харесват, in an underground hole по- ми звучи
- there lived категорично не върви на това изречение - lived само би трябвало да е
- според мен таласъмчето трябва да е "it", макар да може и по двата начина
- повторението на "but most of all he loved to" (за разлика от всички други повторения, които, съзнавам, са умишлени в този текст) ми прави лошо впечатление тук, още повече, че имаме още едно "but" след това.
- последното "But" в този абзац може да се замени с по-"интересна" дума; нещеш ли, един ден храната свършила", вместо потретване but това, but онова, but
- The Old and Wise Granny Dragon came to the meadow
- announced ми звучи, сякаш е пуснала press-release, но ако е официално съобщение, може
- the food is getting scarce
- because the summer is near its end and
- времената нещо не ми се вързват "it was summer now"; на български сякаш минава "сега беше лято", но не съм убеден за английския; но това с времената е доста глобален въпрос; "The gremling didn't know what seasons were" - The gremling didn't know what seasons are ?

Знам че са дребни всичките и че са субективно, но моето лично мнение е, че текстът не е гладък и на ниво за издаване.

High up the mountains, deep inside the forest, alongside the river, in an underground hole lived a gremling. Like all gremlings, it didn't have a name, but everyone called it Gremmy. Gremmy loved to walk its pawsies around the forest, wash its downy fur in the river and bathe itstail in the sun, but above all, it loved to munch. It munched blueberries, strawberries and mushrooms, but most of all he loved to munch blackberries and smear them all over his nuzzle-muzzle. Unfortunately (според мен има по-добра дума за тук), one day there was no food left!

The Old and Wise Granny Dragon landed on the meadow and told the forest creatures, that food will be scarce, because summer was near its end and soon it was going to be autumn and then winter. That was how seasons worked. The gremling didn't know what seasons are...

Высоко в горах, в чащах лесов, там возле речушки, в земляной норе жил малыш леший. У леших обычно нет имен, но все называли кроху Лешенька. Он обожал прогуливать свои лапки в лесу, мыть мохнатую шкурку в речке и греть свой хвостик на солнышке. Но больше всего Лешенька любил поесть. Ежевика, земляника, грибы, а самое вкусное – брусника! Ею Лешенька всю мордочку мордастую вымазывал, кушая с толком и удовольствием.
Но однажды наступил день, когда еда раз – и закончилась!
На опушку выплозла старая Дракониха, лесная детская учительница, и заявила, что мол еда кончается, потому что лето подходит к конецу, грядет осень, за ней зима, а тогда и кушать ничего не остается. Смена, говорит, сезонов такая! Малыш Лешенька не знал что такое «сезоны», однако его животик сильно забеспокоился, что завтра ничего не останется поесть и прийдется голодать. Тут же рожки Лешеньки предложили собраться и пойти на приключение, поискать чем прокормиться всю зиму!
Разбегался Лешенька по норе, в которой жил, стал собираться в путь-дорогу: резал, клепал, перетаскивал, готовил – и наконец собрал нужные для приключения вещи. Взял он котомку, в нее положил гребешок, заколдованный ключ, краюху черствого хлеба, веревку и одну ржавую копеечку. Предстояло невероятное приключение, каким и положено быть всем приключениям!
Ты, малыш лешенька, который слушаешь, или сам читаешь эту сказку, тебе решать что в ней произойдет. От твоего выбора зависит какие приключение переживет Лешенька из книжки. Итак, сначала тебе надо решить куда он направится:
Может войти в Темную пещеру, про которую наслышался, будто растут там волшебные грибы. Помните ведь, что Лешенька очень любит грибы? Любит, конечно, да вот волшебных еще никогда не пробовал. (Глава Вторая)
Может вскарабкаться на Большую гору, где на вершине полным полно брусники. А наш Лешенька обожает бруснику! (Глава Третья)
Может пойти вниз, вдоль Глубокой реки и добраться до деревни, где живут люди. Они часто выбрасывают кукурузные палочки и конфеты и печенье и пряники и всякую-разную вкусную всячину! (Глава Четвертая)
Может войти в Заколдованную чащу, где случается магия, и где растет самый прекрасный цветок в мире. А пыльца с этого Цветка – невероятное лакомство! (Глава Пятая)
Остановился Лешенька и стал думать – куда же пойти?! (Если необходимо, прочтите еще раз и выбирайте Лешеньке путь.)